I don't know... lol ?
Where to start,
Storyline : I know I'll be a little rude on this part, and I apology in advance.
At first when I've read g1rl on the computer I though of the old well known warning " g.i.r.l. = guy in real life" so you'd understand I laughed even if the movie wasn't meant to.
Over-romance is simply getting me bored. On Newgrounds I'm used to have an overdose of hentai, mindless violence and brainless romance, just to say how I don't like the topic itself. Lot of symbolism used as well, like smiling for nothing and holding hands... Anyway, taking an airplane that cost hundreds of $ to meet someone just me on the web is silly as well. They will eventually break up in 3 weeks. This is the way life goes nowadays. Maybe you should make the follow-up on this for your next movie ;)
Music was ok. Fit the theme as well and complement the flash the way it can, brining a good mood. General audio quality was average and was a good deal in between file size and sound quality as well.
Graphics? What to say about them? Lot of shadowing effects lacking and abuse of tweening. Nothing bad by itself.
Graphism was kept simple and was good as is.
A tip, because I feel like you need one, is to use the same object, copy it on a new graphic object, put it all black. I don't know, try with the trees. Once you put the blacked tree in the main flash, use the fading effect to make is 10 to 30% visible, strech it to make it like a real shadow and there you go. Within a minute you created shadow effects for most objects.
Overall it was fine enough to keep the audition to watch it completely, which is already above the average. The whole movie is good as is but is pretty basic. If you want to rework for improvement you can almost touch anything as well.
Good work in general,
Thanks so much for the critique.
I didn't even think about the g.i.r.l. thing. lol. wow. haha.
I would like to say that the meeting on the internet thing and taking a plane to meet each other was not my idea. I did this as a favor for someone.
Also, I am starting a Flash course in school, which will hopefully help me some. (though maybe not since I am probably the most advanced and youngest person in there) o well.
I'll try the shadow thing; I knew about it, just never really tried it.
Thanks again for taking the time to leave a helpful review. =]
After the first listening I had a good impression about it. I love the team anyway which is mostly why I watched it. Anyway, there is my review:
The humour was ok, with a storyline barely based on the game itself. The principle of having the reverse situation was somehow interesting but not pushed over to parody a lot the basics of the game itself. Some jokes weren't interesting while some were. The text reading Sigma could be skipped it wasn't a big deal for the viewer. It should have been presented or introduced somehow more like the real game for a maximum effect, since it's a game pardoy as well.
Graphics were drawed in a ok way. As exemple there were no shadowing effects in most of the case. Good point is the animation is well done with it. Mouths were well set on the voices and well animated as well. Backgrounds isn't the strong point ether but there again I didn't feel it as disturbing.
The voiceacting was good enough. No scratchy sounds from the microphone and about all the same voice level. That's good. Music choices from Megaman was nice and remembered me when I played those games. Always like to hear them. Most of the movie was dialogs anyway.
By the overall, I liked it and watched it twice. You have put efforts into this and the results are there. I hope you can experiment some more on the storylines. You are already skilled with the graphics. You are very close to succes.
Yeah, for this I didnt think so much about the storyline unlike what I did with the previous MMX shorts I have made (expect the first one).
But if you ever go to watch the older ones you will notice a really bif improvement in the graphics.
And same goes with the animation.
But backgrounds are something I should work on, I always find myself not having enough ideas for decent ones.
But anyways, thanks for your opinions and review!
A good movie deserve a good review, so here it is:
Starting with a sweet music and nice high quality panoramic drawings, this movie leads us to a inca warrior's sacred quest. The quest itself is to take-off a menace of giant birds who eats meat, even humans. Using multiple strategies the mytical warrior comes to his ends.
The storyline is well used and good for a nice epic flash movie. Pretty simple for sure, but as nice as an adventure for mytical story.
My personnal comment about the story is as well, the big birds are not tormenting villagers for the pleasure of it. They are simply feeding themselves such as any creature would do. In general animals pick-up what is easyer to get, which is more likely to be cows, sheeps and such before humans in general. But heh, humans fight for themselves first.
What to say about drawings? They were a very good mix-up of still tweens with moving tweens and/or repeated movieclip. Most of the light/shadow effects were perfect. But you missed some such as the torch in the house who emited constant light for a non-constant flame. Backgrounds? They were totally awesome. Well drawn and colorfull. I would even come to compare them with the ones in the brackenwood flash movies.
The music selection was simply awesome. Right in the mood of the movie storyline and still of good quality despite the compressing. Also, I have had a very bad time to identify which song is refering to which author's names.
Deleted scene: You did well to still put it at the end and not scrap it. It tells us well as a reminder that their belief is different than ours. It is a symbol of cultural involvement.
Overall, the movie is clearly awesome.
You've worked hard for it, and I thanks you for your work as you entertained me well with it. Your work really impressed me.
It wasn't really usefull
I'm learning flash these days and I found no help into watching all this tutorial. You should describe and suggest the tools we need to use as it makes it easyer to follow. And show an exemple step-by-step with explanation would enhance this. Maybe you could even use some printscreens from macromedia to support your sayings.
Main quality was good, with pills moving and graphics. The tutorial is also very short.
it did have print screens and step by steps. was short there is another section but filesize was huge. thx...
But oh well ... Crocodiles aren't ocean creatures. Sad isn't it?
Oh and, don't forget next time to class this in movies, not games.
I do not really know what you are talking about. Since it’s interactive as in “Click on the coconut” I think it’s totally a game. How do you know this one is based in the ocean anyways?
The game takes 1337 kbs.
Good goj on this.
Classical parallel to Metal, but still something
Starting with some strange uninteresting beeping sounds, the song goes there with some piano, and then adds the electronic guitar all with some slow battery beat. The song is mid-long. I generally prefer songs that last long, as the artist can use many forms to express the approximately same melody.
The song itself is interesting. Unfortunately, the mix of instrumental at first may unplease the metal lovers, and the metal at the main part unplease the instrumental lovers. Well, this is part of if anyway, I liked it. I also have to say it isn't classical, but metal.
The choice o the name is interesting. Thinking with the mood the song and the title in the head, it is easy for flash artist to build up a hero-based story like so many done before.
I have another clue for you : the song is nice, but even after a few listenings, nothing stay for long in my head. This is an effect important of the music which separate the very nice songs and the ok songs.
Actually I'm pretty sure it would worth it to make a V2 of that song. You know, a little diffrent pattern. For exemple, you could use guitar with no distorsion to reach the first part effect you obviously liked to make, and just switch up the distorsion for later with the battery. I would also suggest the song to be longer, LONGER ...
Thanks for the tips man. To answer your "cons", the strange beeping sounds is, on my keyboard, "synth toms" and yes i agree in a way. And, well yeah I was wondering about what genre this could be. Maybe... miscelanious (sp)? And, I like your idea of a version 2. When I was making this I was thinking it'd be cool to make a techno version of this song. And maybe an all-out metal version, with maybe just piano. To be honest with you, I'm just starting out... people tell me I'm talented XD but I don't know squat unless someone teaches me or I learn from someone. I will be making more brutal songs in the future though, its just I started off on keys and don't want to give them up. But I appreciate you reviewing my content!
This songs drives us in a universe where noises compose music. Some parts of the sound taken alone could torture anyone trapped to listen it, but the overall patter makes it fairly good. That was nicely surprising.
This song also have another particularity. The overuse of repetitive patterns lead to a long-song result of 7 minutes. The beat relatively stays the same. I generally prefer long songs but this one don't deserve a perfect grade. Netherless, it is a good song with an interesting concept.
Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it. Yes, I think the beat was probably pretty repetitive. I have already taken this into account, though, since this is a pretty old song. All of my songs I have released elsewhere, and given the two songs a day limit, I'm just working my way up through them. My better ones are yet to come (although already completed).
Anyways, I'd just like to thank you for listening, and writing a review that actually uses more than one sentence. Most people just listen to the very beginning of one of my songs, give me a shitty rating, and then move on, sometimes leaving the word "cool" or "bad" behind when they go.
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